Essays that got me into almost all of the uc's
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So today we're going to be doing something I have been dreading for a while, which is revisiting my college essays. I'm going just going by you see essays, Cliffy like those air coming up pretty soon. They ask you how you're going to say that you're fine and I'll also be sharing my tips that I think are pretty important to keep in mind. I did have a college counselor for like, a hot second, like it was like, two weeks. Everything she told it was kind of like Look, I wrote an essay. Then later on in the summer, I joined this summer workshop thing at my school where we had admission officers come to our school and read our essays and help us out with their college applications. I had the birthday representative read my essays that I worked on with my college counselor. I, like, followed her by some wrote, like all my essays like They're ready to go to Berkeley. Rep was basically like, This is not over looking for at all in a college essay. Not only what I think is good practice for these essays, but also what I know is good essay writing methods given to me by an admissions officer from Berkeley. One someone, it's a college counselor, so I've had to. Even though the Berkeley rapidly looked up passes like once her insight and what she told me was really a good like framework for what I built my essays off of and my college and curse at her counsel was amazing, of course, throughout the entire process. So the first essay we're gonna start with is the academic subject. Describe how you have further this interest inside and outside the classroom. I decided shock about a really like biology and AP Bio and Sciences and how I was inspired to go towards that field. I talked about what interests me, and it was three Indian system and I was like, Terms are everywhere. Buying two only one particular engine I love learning about the human body is delicate because he's so much that I convinced my parents transfer meets the only campus in our district that offered by a medical program that was kind of like how I started my essay off. Finally, talking about a big idea and describing how it's like, interesting and connecting it to me. If you're gonna talk about your interests or passions, always find a way to link it back to you and what you did to pursue it. There's not a lot of hospital wanting activities for 13 year old because most 13 year olds were playing all the hospitals in my area really looking for 60 year old and I don't turn 16 until like my junior year. So I was like, No, that's how come past I'm you'd like long turn. So I talked about how even though the hospital was so far away, I went down there because I loved the subject and this career and this field. Then I talked about how quickly confirmed that I wanted career in the hospital where I was actively engaged in finding future healthcare solutions. I wanted to, so I was like, Imagine yourself sitting down in front of college admissions officers talking to them. You don't mean but you definitely pick your words little more carefully with another one of my essays. How has this challenge of your academic achievement? The number one tip I can give you is Don't talk about divorce and don't talk about moving. My parents told me where with me again, right before middle school started being very shy. Then I talked about how, through that struggle I gained an important characteristic which is learning to be independent, that I talked about how the transition promote. How I turned my challenge into a bonus, you know? Okay, let's put my next guest is the greatest out I say for this essay problem, which is what would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated that time Over time, I said the sweat rolled down my forehead and my racket slashed the air as I served the ball up the court. Okay, so you might think starting off the essay it's about me being a amazing tennis stud. What this club is about this essay is about how my club involvement, Let's my character development and what it taught me and how I would be a great addition to their campus. Further by brain let Philip to whichever college I intend, increasing the impact I can make it. By bringing this club to college, I plan on spreading awareness about the hardships faced by a large number of individuals and Third World countries, especially Woman as avid supporter woman's rights and 10 on being heavily involved in the remedial process of equality and community service. Connected biology and medicine and how I want and pursue a career to make the world a better place. I hope that these essays sound like I put a lot of time effort into them because I did, and I started writing them fairly early. I was like with few can take Uber and I attended a college workshop the same one that I went to last year as a rising senior toe work on my essays. So I turned that workshop and I was like, basically talked to the college counselor that really helped me. You have to write Your ass is no way to where the college officials are reading it. I feel like you shouldn't rush the process because my process was how many months on? I'm not saying it would have to work on them for eight months, but for me to really for my thoughts and create a cohesive say's that flowed really well and all had a team big brain energy. I gave everyone good tips on running your essays.